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Scoble has posted the first chapter to his book "Blog or Die". I have not read the entire chapter yet but I wanted to comment on the first sentence. The first sentence is:

"Every few years, something comes along to change the way everything is."

I think first sentences are very important, they set the tone for the entire book. I can go back and re-read the first sentence of a book and be instantly thrown into that book. (If the first sentence is good) This sentence needs a little work, it is way to generic and bland. I think I know where he is going though, he just needs to be a little more assertive. Something like this would read much better to me:

"Every few years a new innovation comes along that changes everything."

"Every few years a new technology comes along and changes everything."

"Every few years a new technology comes along and changes the world"

or even simpler:

"Every few years a new technology changes the world"

Any of these is much more direct and forceful in my mind. Hopefully this is the kind of comments you were looking for, Robert.

-James